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:star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

Here comes the critique you requested, I hope it's helpful <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" title=":) (Smile)"/> (Don't get hung up on those stars, I never know what to check there)

The biggest impact of this piece is the contrast between the b/w parts and the red. That works really well as far as leading the eye to the girl and the petals is concerned. However, the two crows get almost completely lost in the trees as the contrast there is not so great. (Their position could be improved if you take one further away from the girl and further off center than the other, forming an uneven triangle that leads the eye from the crow in the background, which would be smaller, to the bigger brow to the girl)

The background in its b/w form is very uniformly textured, that means that besides the colour/no-colour contrast, you have not much contrast left to peel the lady from the background - if you gave it some sort of vignette (darker on the edges of the canvas), it may work in favour of your piece.

The red on her dress while giving a good contrast could use some livelyness in my opinion (though that is mostly a matter of taste and intention I guess). I'd have brought in some slightly different shades to make it more dynamic (using colour balance for example).

Lastly, I'm afraid the petals don't look very much like petals safe for their form. They seem to be floating above the ground instead of resting on it, which is largely due to missing shadows and missing perspective. The way they are they are uniformy transformed to fit the ground, but in reality, they would all fall down in a slightly different angle, each sticking up differently and casting a slightly different shadow on the ground according to the ground's high points and depressions. Maybe some leaves would be obscured by "folds" in the ground or by other b/w leaves overlapping them after the wind took them...